"Something you lost will soon turn up"

Okay...so...this might be stupid...it might be not. But let me know what y'all think. So it begins with the teenage girl character lounging in her bed holding a picture of her boyfriend in a heart frame. She holds the picture tightly and sighs. She picks up her phone next to her and dials. A boy's voice answers. The girl says "last night was so amazing..I am so....the rest of her sentence gets cut off as she hears a knock on her door. She gets up to open it. She looks straight ahead and sees no one, as she is about to close the door she looks down and sees a little girl wearing all pink. (The personification of Virginity) The little girl looks all cute and innocent at first. The teenager bends down to talk to her. All of a sudden the little girl gets angry, pulls out a large bat and strikes the teen straight across the face until she hits the floor appearing lifeless. The scene ends.

I wanted mine to be short and straight to the point. I don't know if it works or not. So please let me know. Coming up with initial stories are not my forte. Also..I want to do this in Flash.